Being!

Eyes heavy with sleep,

brain alive and willing,

sadness through the happiness.

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26 thoughts on “Being!

  1. I love the paradox of that last line, Charles. Most often you hear it stated more like happy through the sadness, but you’ve reversed the thought. I like that, it gives a completely different perspective and feel.

    I know of the sentiment you express.

    • Hi Elle, thanks for this comment, I thought this poem, as I had the feeling would come easily, but was I wrong, the last line must have taken over an hour, writing and rewriting on and on, then I just decided hit the publish and see what happens. Well people seem to have loved it, but I may change it, sometime later. I tried to capture the feeling of one Schubert’s works, particularly his piano trios, which have this light beautiful melody, but appearing underneath in the counterpoint and harmony is a profound sadness. I think by reversing this sentence I have achieved this, though I hardly realized that I had done this, so thanks for pointing it out to me, Best wishes and blessings, Charles.

    • To much perfection can be a problem, I have worked with people who written enormous amounts, but published and read nothing, as they are tied in knots, about whether the poems are perfect. I do however, change poems quite often, especially, when getting ready for reading or publication. Best wishes and blessings, Charles.

      • You’re so right, Charles. Being driven by perfection can be a curse. It definitely is an inhibitor. I also edit stories, even after I’ve “released” them for limited readership.
        I read somewhere that a writer should publish when he/she has taken the work as far as they can––to the best of their ability. If it’s not there, continue to work. If it IS there, let it go!
        Thanks for your work. I appreciate it.

      • I usually write, edit, put it on my blog, then read it live at poetry evening, I take a pen with me, and mark each place where I hesitate during the reading, and look back over these places at home, to see if that area of the poem needs improvement, It usually works well, and I end up with a really great poem. Best wishes, and blessings, Charles.

      • That’s a terrific process–one which obviously bears fruit. I read my stories outloud as well, and it’s amazing what will surface with an auditory component. That keeps us from being too tied to the “silent” word. Thanks for sharing that.

    • Charles, as you see I attempted to re-blog this post. Unfortunatley something didn’t work as it should have and I needed to delete it. I’ll try again.
      Thank you anyway!

      • Hi sorry that this attempt did not work, hope it was not something that I did or didn’t do. I am not very good with using computers and their programming. Thanks for liking it enough to want to re-blog it. Best wishes and blessings, Charles.

      • No, it had nothing to do with you. When I reblogged, somehow it came with a very large picture of my gravitar photo, and that seemed inappropriate at best. I’m not sure how to change that. When I have a moment, I’ll research and tweak. So, no worries. It’s not at your end.

      • Ah, thanks, I am not really very computer literate, am reading a book on blogging, maybe that will improve my abilities, and my blog. Charles, πŸ™‚

    • Hi Julia, thanks for the accolade and for enjoying this poem so much, I thought it would be an easier poem to write, but after writing hundreds of last lines, I chose one that I was happier with than most of them and went with it, so it along time. Best wishes and blessings, Charles.

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